Moment in Time
Yes me my family got to splash planet. As we were there I wanted to rush to the slides. I went on Wednesday and it was fun because I went fast down the slides. They are brown white orange and blue.
It was fun going down the fast slide because we laid in the water at the bottom. It was deep at the bottom. But after our swim my baby sister and mum had a little swim. After our swim we played a little land and mini golf and on the roundabout. The fun part was when I went on the jungle jeeps and the bumper boats. We had lunch. A dog came over to me and was sitting there and staring at me. As I went for a swim it followed me in the pool and it was dog paddling the whole way around.
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Ceanahlee j
Hi Ceanahlee. I loved how u explained the detail of where u went and what color the slides are orange and blue and stuff. what u could improve on is your spelling and maybe more paragraphs.
ReplyDeleteyour lucky you got to go to splash planet
ReplyDeletesounds like you had fun Ceanahlee I think you need to work on making your sentences longer and making more compound sentences
ReplyDeletecool you got to go to splash planet also great stroy i love it
ReplyDeleteI like how you put some detail in your story and i liked how you explaned how the dog was swimming
ReplyDeleteAwesome moment in time Ceanahlee.
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